Would you be willing to critique the following Bio. I am a new agent with EXP
“Hi. I’m Mark Alan Ferguson, how can I help you?
There’s no place else in Texas as vibrant and rewarding as NE Tarrant County. Owning property here can be one of the best personal investments you will ever make. I love this area have watched it grow from the 80’s till now. Once I show you around, I’m convinced you will love it too and want to be a part of one of our great communities. When to buy? Where to buy? What areas should I avoid? How can I really make sure I’m getting a good deal? These are the questions I can help you answer. Give me a call today at 817-475-5111 and let’s get started!
Dedicated Service for The Best Results
We are committed to providing our clients with the best service possible. We have the experience and local know-how to help you make the best possible decisions. I am teamed with an experienced broker and we have specialized training in real estate negotiation so having me on your side means you’re working with real professionals. I’d like to earn your business so call me today and I’ll work extra hard to make sure your real estate transaction is a complete success!
What makes NE Tarrant County so unique?
Our great schools in this area have been the foundation for the fabulous neighborhoods that have been built in NE Tarrant County. For example, Keller ISD, Grapevine-Colleyville ISD, Hurst-Euless-Bedford ISD, just to name a few have excellent ratings. DFW is one of the most business friendly areas in the country, with close proximity to DFW airport for personal/business travel and Alliance airport for our massive business growth, this area will continue to prosper in the future.
Did you know?
Real Estate Markets are driven by supply and demand like any product. This demand for housing in Tarrant county is always fluctuating but our values have consistently maintained or increased since the early 90s. We were fortunate that we didn’t see the deep housing price decreases like some of the other areas of the country during the recession. This means that Tarrant County, Texas is a great place to make your real estate investment.”
I think the “Dedicated Service for The Best Results” section needs some work. I wouldn’t mention the other people on your team directly, but instead just focus on “our team”, or even “my team” and what they bring to the table. Maybe something like “our team has a combined XXX years of experience in Texas real estate so…” Also, “I
d like to earn your business” sounds like you’re not worthy of their business now and need to “earn it”. No one cares about helping someone “earn” something, they just want the best price or the best deal with minimal hassle.
The last paragraph mentions investors. Does you team work with investors? If not, you should focus on what people really want from your farm area; a happy place to raise their families.